Sunday, August 7, 2011

Opinions on beginning of my short story please? (easy 10pts)?

It seems kinda pointless and nothing much is really going on. Your endulged into this character that I feel no emotion for. Some of the discriptions are good though the part of the vanilla extract reminds me of what I used to do when I was young how we try these things. I would rather like to read a part where something is actually going on but anyway don't give up.

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